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Is This Poem Written Well, And Is It Any Good?

The Cheatgrass and the Scythe There's an old farmer's tale called "The Cheatgrass and the Scythe," where we give gratitude to our pendulum hands Every spring, the cheatgrass creeps near like a thief...
03:02 Sun 07th Jun 201563 answers, last by bob68k 16:34 Sat 13th Jun 2015
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What Poetic Devices Are Used In This Poem If Any? Can Someone Help Analyze This Short Poem Please? Thanks.

http://hawaiipacificreview.org/tag/robert-karaszi/...
21:18 Mon 21st Jul 20143 answers, last by Khandro 00:13 Tue 22nd Jul 2014
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How Is This Poem So Far? Its Not Done Yet. Just Want To Know How It Reads Up To Now.

October. Summer's incessant bloom whittles on- though in the pith of fall, leaves twitch red through the eddy at eventide. Once we sat short-sleeved in a river house, lolled in thought of dreams thick...
21:41 Fri 22nd Nov 20135 answers, last by boomster 14:55 Sat 07th Dec 2013
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Does This Poem Make Sense So Far? Thanks For The Comments Folks.

Its not finished yet. Just wanted to see if its okay so far. _____________________________________________________________ Raw lucidity in the clouds stretched like a linen cape; I strode beside the...
04:04 Mon 06th May 20135 answers, last by woofgang 12:48 Mon 06th May 2013
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Does This Poem Make Sense So Far?

Its not finished yet. I just wanted to see what these two stanzas might convey to people. As always, thanks for the comments folks. Nearby the iron bark tree my fathers flesh drafted to ashes,...
01:32 Thu 14th Mar 201311 answers, last by elliemay1 00:37 Sun 17th Mar 2013
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Am I Using The Word 'vellum' Properly In This Poem?

Does the usage of this word make sense in this opening stanza (vellum) taking in account the poetic license? Thanks for the advice folks. 'Give me the night; a canvas of stars tattooed to the vellum...
06:04 Sun 10th Mar 201322 answers, last by Tilly2 18:00 Sun 10th Mar 2013
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Feedback On This Poem Would Be Appreciated. (Revised Draft)

'From The Streets To The Hudson' Avenues plugged into the pulse of concrete where wedge-shaped skyscrapers shoulder the horizon; I see a parade of tourists, musing upon tower tops piercing the...
21:34 Wed 06th Mar 20135 answers, last by chrissa1 21:23 Fri 08th Mar 2013
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What Do You Think About This Poem? Any Feedback Would Be Appreciated. Thanks.

'From The Streets To The Hudson' Smog plugged into a polyphonic dome and concrete blossoms under my heels; removed from Irish fields, where frothy ambrosia turns luminous, curling the silken sheet of...
05:06 Tue 05th Mar 20137 answers, last by Quizmonkey 13:30 Tue 05th Mar 2013
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Is Thos Poem Any Good? Feedback Appreciated.

'Cafe Angelika Revisited' Twilight's saffron haze reduced to memory as light strengthens its spars over the horizon silhouetted gossamer, woven upon ash wood and hedge taut like strings on a violin...
06:03 Thu 28th Feb 20131 answer, last by Quizmonkey 11:45 Thu 28th Feb 2013
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Am I Using This Word Properly?

The word PREEN, I know what it means and it does have different meanings. I'm trying to use it in one of my poems. 'the first kiss preened from your lips, revived this weary traveler' Is this correct,...
03:27 Thu 21st Feb 201316 answers, last by flicrat 23:00 Fri 22nd Feb 2013
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What Do You Think About This Poem? Any Feedback Would Be Appreciated. Thanks.

'From My Terrace Down' Twilight's saffron haze reduced to memory as light strengthens its spars over the horizon silhouetted gossamer woven upon ash wood and hedge taut like strings on a violin from...
03:14 Mon 18th Feb 20137 answers, last by Anngel 05:24 Wed 20th Feb 2013

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