victorians

[ilovetaz]

i am doin a project for school, about victorians, Dr. Barnardo, does anyone no anything i can do, I'M DEAD!!!!!

[jno]

you might want to run a spell check on it...

[Machecoul]

Sp: straight / something

where .. not were

... i shall become Dr Barnado ???? I shall train to be a doctor might make more sense.

Keep up the good work!

[joko]

Most people don't sign their name after an entry in their diary.

Here's a few corrections to be going on with. Anything in red is an alteration add-on or removal to check against your copy.
Dear Diary,

Today I left Dublin. Sophie was very sad. I said goodbye to Mother, who is close to death. I am going to London. I shall become a missionary.
It was one of the saddest moments of my life saying farewell to Sophie, Mother was far too ill to come and say goodbye, but at least I have Sophie. I love her dearly and it will be hard to live without her. Thomas Barnardo

Dear Diary,

I am in England and my-oh-my what a dreadful place it is! As I came to where I would be staying, I got a dreadful fright. There is a number of children begging on the streets. I have never seen such a ghastly sight! I must do something to help. I shall become a doctor and help the younger generations. I will set up a homes for them, upstairs will be beds for them to sleep in and downstairs will be classrooms were they can learn carpentry, tailoring and shoe making.  I believe every child has the right to secure and loving childhood. My homes will supply free food and drink for the less fortunate.

[joko]

There were a few extra space between words too.

Dear Diary,

I have been here a week and dear Sophie has sent me a letter
It was a small piece of work but I read it over and over as if it was a masterpiece by Mr. Dickens. I miss Mother and Sophie so much. I started my reply straight away -


Dearest  Sophie,

I�m missing you too, my work is going tremendously well, but there may be a change of plan. When I arrived in England, I saw the most shocking things. Hundreds of children lying about on the streets begging, I shall do something!

[ilovetazzy]

Oh, I thought I did a quite a good job

[ilovetazzy]

Is that spelt right?!

[joko]

It's not a bad job, just a few spelling, grammar and punctuation mistakes. I haven't added anything except the words 'at least', 'going' and 'doctor'

[ilovetaz]

what do you mean i'm 9 well nearly 10

[ilovetaz]

but i am 9!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[ilovetaz]

taz is me dog if your wondering

[Pies]

Dont get sucked in 10ClarionSt bet it's a 40 year old builder called Barry

[ilovetaz]

HEY!

[ilovetaz]

If u don't belive me ill try and put a pic on opf me!!!!!!!!!! and Taz

[ilovetaz]

Sorry I can't do it