Here Is A Poem I Wrote, Do You Like It?

[inamuddle1]

Neutron particals of lilac light person,
Scandalous energy,
Enchanted city,
engraved and critical kaleidoscope salvation
for a revolution of rhymes and medleys of discrimination.
Gravity,
proof
chamber of chaos
Orchestra orb
oracle origin.
A children's story and a day in the life.
A dream,
A forest,
a thousand nights.
Addictive acknowledgement with presence of mind,
a gift of natures navigators
Afternoon coffee bugs
Air locked ceremony of the sun.
Jade jewel of shimmering realm melodies
celebration,
sway,
crack open a bottle
de-javu,
Indian indigo summer.
The root of light,
sun, star, moon, initiate.
Fresh fruit distribution.
The future light of Neutron particals of lilac light,
The future calls the dawn.
Galaxy to Galaxy,
flying saucers sorcerer,
with a joystick for navigation,
bringing us back to decriminalisation.
Self modification with no complication,
Drop me of at NASA Station.

[Tilly2]

I had a feeling that this post might deteriorate. I didn't realise how far it would go though.

[tonyav]

Hey DTC no need to bring the goats into it !.
Naughty gal mamya.

[EcclesCake]

Nope, still not doing it for me.

You seem to be swinging between mature and child like terms; it makes the reading quite disjointed IMHO.

[inamuddle1]

Ok doctor deep balls,
show us your all,
show me some words you have written,
I'm feeling like my fingers have been bitten :(
With my writing i am smitten.

Meow, the little kitten

[inamuddle1]

I'm sorry that was very rude of me, please accept my appologies

[TWR]

Nice knowing you.

[inamuddle1]

Nice knowing you too :) x

[doctordb]

No worries, here's some (post production).

INT. LIVING ROOM - DAY

A solid punch from sonny's fist slams into savvas' swollen and bloodied face. Save as is tied to a chair in his own home.

Charlie sits at a desk in the corner searching a computer.

Sonny lands another vicious blow.

SONNY
where?

No response so sonny hits out again.

SONNY (CONT'D)
Tell me and it's over.

[boxtops]

inamuddle, you admit that the first poem is phrases from someone else's publication about dreams - which is plagiarism, passing off other people's work as your own. If I were you I would be very careful about publishing it (as you have) on a public website.

[DTCwordfan]

inamuddle1 writes for tension
dr b getting an honourable mention
our new bard is in ascension
to become the Ed's latest suspension
to his verse no comprehension
no deep insights and perception
may be a glimpse of misapprehension
just an entry in AB annals, a footnote of a mention.

[inamuddle1]

No sorry, you are wrong, it was a dream dictionary!!! Wrong again. Stop slating me and accept me for the writer that i am.

[boxtops]

I'm not slating you - just pointing out that plagiarism is an offence, and you said you'd got the words from elsewhere.

I can't pretend to like something which doesn't make any sense to me, and I don't care for your later poems either, not my cup of tea at all. I wouldn't pay to read them.

[Tilly2]

ha!

[inamuddle1]

I dont need you to like it. I just dont like the fact your stating that Its plagiarism when it clearly is not. Its random words from a dictionary.

[Sharingan]

I quite liked both, but peace out if you like them then that's all that matters.

[inamuddle1]

>:)

[boxtops]

Fair enough, but that's not what you said originally. You wrote

"how i made this was from reading a dream book. Taking sentences from the book"

That to me says that you took sentences from someone else's work. That's plagiarism. If that's not what you meant, and not what you did, then good, but it IS what you originally said.

[inamuddle1]

It is a book, its a dream dictionary. Sorry i didnt realise i had to explain what book lol... Its a very good book actually. Its called The Dreamers Dictionary written by Stearn Robinson and Tom Corbett. I love this book, it's like my bible.

[shoota]

Forget self publishing - spend your money on cakes.