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bednobs | 13:44 Mon 15th Aug 2011 | ChatterBank
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Hi, just ordering a grave marker for my son, so i want it to be right. Can you tell me if this line has the right punctuation please (spacing, capitals punctuation)?
In our arms for a day; in our hearts forever.
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Looks good to me beddy.
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no 2nd capital I needed?
semi colon the right thing, or 2 sentences?
Bednobs, there are people here on this site better qualified than me to comment on the grammar. I just wanted say that they are very moving sentiments expressed in that line.
I think a comma but the sentiments the same and that's the most important thing.
I'm no expert, and wish my school was better at teaching, but it looks ok to me. That said, I use punctuation so it reads much as I would say something. I guess the semicolon could be substituted for other punctuation if desired.
I would go for:

In our arms for a day,
In our hearts forever.

But that's just my personal preference - I think it gives a more poetic feel to it.
You could write it in 2 sentences, but I think the one you show will look better. No, no second capital, it is the same sentence, as shown.
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thanks Mike, i don't have room for another line unfortunate;y
If you write it on two lines in verse form then you would use a second capital.
semi colon is fine, no need for capital on the 2nd.

in ordinary circumstances you could replace the semicolon with and or a full stop, but what you have done is fine, and is fitting for the sentiment. charles dickens used it thus:

It was the best of times; it was the worst of times.
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thanks for your help
Mrs Dustypuss says it should be in inverted comas like so : - ( she is a english teacher )

"In our arms for a day; in our hearts forever"
Lol or even 'an' English teacher! Her version is correct though.
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Does Mrs Dustypuss know how to spell commas?
Bednobs this is the saddest thread on here today. Very sorry that you are having to do this at all. The words are lovely but heartbreaking.
For a memorial, you don't need inverted commas, it's not direct reported speech.......... I like it as it is, bednobs, the semi-colon gives that extra breathing space which you don't get with a comma.
Oh Bednobs
Just to say I am thinking of you
Just for the record Mrs DP is the teacher. Not me! my grammer is crep

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