Poem Help

[cpfc]

I hope this sounds ok and alright to do. My Daughter has got to write a Poem about dont smoke.
Is there anyone aout there that can write a Poem for me about this subject for her as im really thick.
No dirty words please and i wont make any money from it lol.

Many Thanks to you all

[paraffin]

Hi cpfc:

I'll have a go and get back later this evening. I take it your daughter's still at primary school? Don't want to use words too "advanced" for her, if that doesn't sound smug?

[khoey]

this might be to advanced if she`sin primary school


Don't smoke it's not a joke.
Just one pack will set you back.
Be cool not a fool.
Keep your wealth and your health.
Don't smoke it's not a joke.

[cpfc]

That sounds cool khoey

[cpfc]

Shes in Primary school paraffin and thx for help

[cazzz1975]

can she not try to do it herself? write a lot of words associated with smoking and come up with a simple verse, surely it would be better her having a go at it herself than getting other people to do her homework for her?

[grasscarp]

If you smoke a cigarette
At first you'll choke and feel regret.
But try again when offered one
Until the habit feels like fun.

As years go by you think it's cool
Never thinking you're the fool
Banned from smoking in a bar
you're in the street inhaling tar

You're coughing and your lungs are bad
An Xray shows a shadow, sad
The cigarette, all by itself
Destroys your wealth and then your health.

[khoey]

thanks cpfc
just trying to get an idea of her age cpfc what age group is she in? if thats a bit to old i will thing of something else later,

[cpfc]

shes age 10

[cpfc]

thats a good one grass thx

[pastafreak]

Hellooooo...... whose assignment was this?.....Not anyone's on AB. It was your daughters assignment. How is she supposed to learn anything if you are getting others to do it ...because you are 'really thick'as you say??? YOU shouldn't be doing it for her,full stop !!!!
I apologise if I am coming across as rude.....but you are not helping your daughter.

[cazzz1975]

yes I was trying to convey that point pasta :)

[cpfc]

Thats ok pasta i understand. shes not going to copy it just gettin tips and seeing if she can get help.
ive told her not to copy the whole thing
but i no what ur saying. and i agree with you

[pastafreak]

Sorry cazzzz....I saw yours after I posted. I am in ****** of a mood....so I just had my rant.

[Sachs]

Hiya cp ;0)
cazzz is right really. Whatever you come up with wont have your daughters personal input/ style. I would go with what cazzz said & let her write something, does'nt have to 'rhyme' She will feel good about herself & enjoy it too! xxx

[cazzz1975]

then dont give her tips, of course she will copy it, tell her to write down as many words she can to associate with smoking. with a list of words she can make up her own rhymes, in the style of a story or a warning or just how she see's smoking

it doesnt have to be award winning, just her own work. you know and I know that she will take the easy option if you give it.

[Velvetee]

I like clean air and don't like smoke
The nasty smell makes me cough and choke

It's also bad for your general health
As well as making you spend your wealth

If you want to live for very long
and you don't want to stink and pong

Stick to your guns and you will win
Lets start by chucking them a bin

[cpfc]

ok cazz ive just wrote a few words out and shes now trying.
Thanks for the help and shes having problems but ive told her not to rush and thanks for that

[swedeheart]

Hi cpfc, Sachs is right, a poem doesn't have to be in rhyme - but that may be what her teacher is expecting it to be? Do you know?

Anyway cazzz and pastafreak are right, it will do her good to do it for herself and you can help, as cazzz says, by sitting down with her to come up with a list/mindmap of words related to smoking. Once she has her list, you could have a look at RhymeZone together - that's not cheating methinks. I typed in the word smoke just to get you started, but you can of course ask for rhymes on any word on your list. Go on, have a try together!

[cpfc]

so far shes put
ChokeChoke,Choke
Smokings not a joke
choke choke choke
smoking stunts ur growth

sounds good to me

[Sachs]

Brill cp! x