Okay for me the subject matter was interesting enough but too much too soon in terms of characters etc. Some passages could be taken several ways and it's rather 'American' in writing style which on a personal level doesn't appeal to me much but lots of US writers are very successful, so that's purely a personal thing. Your style is slightly reminiscent of Stephen King, 'Christine' in particular and on the whole I like the story and would happily read more but flesh it out a bit and go slower, it's sounding more like a one shot fan fic at the moment and less like a novel but I think it ha promise and you write well and descriptively.