Please rate my song lyrics! Thanks :)

[jeffgreggs]

Hi this is a song written from the heart, about my own experiences. Let me know what you think! :)

BALLAD OF THE BROKEN HEART
You were my soul
You were my life
You’re cutting me
Like a knife

I thought that I had seen the light
Holding on to you so tight
I wish that you’d come back to me
I was blind, but now I see

I wish that I had seen the signs
Before your hand slipped from mines
My heart is breaking everyday
Wishing my pain away

You said I meant
Nothing to you
But since you’ve gone
My heart’s in two

When you’re around, my nerves were shot
From the start your love I’ve sought
At the start I was so shy
Without your love I thought I’d die
When I asked you to be mine
I never thought I’d crossed the line

I thought that I had seen the light
Holding on to you so tight
I wish that you’d come back to me
I was blind, but now I see

I wish that I had seen the signs
Before your hand slipped from mines
My heart is breaking everyday
Wishing my pain away

I wish you would
Walk through my door
And things would be
As they were before

I thought that I had seen the light
Holding on to you so tight
I wish that you’d come back to me
I was blind, but now I see

I wish that I had seen the signs
Before your hand slipped from mines
My heart is breaking everyday
Wishing my pain away

[factor-fiction]

Hi- all your efforts posted on AB seem quite good to me and are certainly more meaningful than the lyrics in most current songs. What response have you got from all the other forums (fora?) you've posted this question on (including Horse and Homes)?

[boxtops]

Horse and Homes?

[factor-fiction]

I'm glad you didn't forget to post them on the Toronto Roofing Contractor's FAQ site

[factor-fiction]

http://horseandhomes....ab4f80c7cdf5c1e297cef

[sir.prize]

jeffgreggs - I suppose all your three songs are OK. But there are already three songs with those titles.

[pastafreak]

Been posted on AB before,also... http://www.theanswerb.../Question1125490.html

Those Horse and Homes Q's are all a bit ...strange.... ;-(

[sir.prize]

pastafreak- maybe he has posted them again 'cos he didn't like the earlier answers/comments.

[ELVIS68]

Your song is good
But I think you should
Forget the rhyming
And stick to timing

Not every line
Has to rhyme
Unless it's a rap
Which is probably crap

So take my advice
Which I think is nice
If you want a hit
Stop this rhyming sh..

[pastafreak]

The earlier answers/comments were quite favourable...and he/she seemed pleased with them.

[jomifl]

mines ?